Gunshots (Friday Fictioneers)

the-phone

There were like these gunshots outta nowhere.  I’m like “whoa, somebody’s shootin’, what’s going on Jimmy?”  Cause I was rollin’ with my man Jimmy.

But then I saw Jimmy was down, and I was all “Jimmy’s down, Jimmy’s down.”  Cause Jimmy was like down and shit.  There was blood and I was freaking out, “Jimmy caught one.”  Yeah, he got shot, what’d I say?

So I gotta call 5-oh and shit, but I ain’t got no phone, so I checked for a PF1.  But then the handset was all shot or busted or whatever.  Good thing you guys came anyways.

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Other Friday Fictioneers posts of mine can be found as below:

Shadows

Michael Nicoletta

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26 Comments

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26 responses to “Gunshots (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Alvin,
    I’m like all about this piece. Good one. The voice is fun.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  2. It’s already been said, but good voice.

  3. Hey! I heard a character in there! SO cool! Entertaining, too. Nice work!

  4. Loved the language. Really painted the picture

  5. the language came off very convincingly 🙂 fun story !

  6. I think I heard this guy on the news yesterday. 🙂 The language worked, like, ya know, perfectly.

    janet

  7. Interesting writing voice!

  8. Great use of the idiot, I mean, idiom! 😉

  9. Awesome narrator voice. That could be something right off the evening news. 🙂

  10. COuld have easily been pulled from a news report. Realistic voice and language.

  11. Very well done, thoroughly enjoyable!

  12. I”m all “Wow this is good!’

  13. Pingback: Abandoned (Friday Fictioneers) | mauvaispoemes

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